Week #3 100 Word Challenge

One day before school, I was told that I won a trip to Disney World. I was super excited, but it had to be after class. I left my house to go there and I told all my friends about it. I was waiting all day for the bell to ring. Looking at the clock to check the time, but it seemed to be going backwards. I was not happy. Finally the first bell rang again so I could hop on a plane and fly to Disney World. When I got there I was so happy. It was the best trip ever.

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  1. HillcrestBlog3October 4, 2018 at 1:46 PM

    Hello Acasp7,
    This is an interesting story idea. It is easy to imagine time seeming to go backwards while you are waiting to do something exciting. In the 'sentence' where you use the prompt, it is a sentence fragment. You seem to have left out, "I looked at the clock..." Remember that the focus of today's lesson was to avoid repeating words in such a short piece of writing e.g. bell, Disney World, and happy. Keep on writing and learning.
    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Van

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